the Canada day birthday
It was July 1st 2014 and I had flown to Ottawa for Canada day. I was driving to Parliament hill early enough to get there before anyone else. By the time I got there I thought the hill would be empty but my news competitors were there, so I set up my set and went to sleep. when I woke up I saw flames, crowds swimming to the hill! So I set up my camera thats when the flashes of white started" Hi this is barry pits reporting live from Parliament hill the fireworks just started see you tomorrow every one.
A great idea for a story. One of your better pieces of writing. I think you are missing the word prompt celebrated. There are some important words that need capitals that you need to fix. Don't forget that you need a period at the end of a sentence and if someone is speaking then start a new line.
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