The Professor.crocodile:
It was the day I get my shots at Professor.Crocodile`s office. I herd that he was difficult to talk to, twisted like a murder, and puts purple ooze that after a week it puts you in a coma. its was 2 hours till i got my shots so I went to leave but I decided not to. after about half an hour in I decided to go get some food, I waited 5 minuets for my food. when I got my food I went back I and it was my turn to go in...I went in he seemed nice.
It was the day I get my shots at Professor.Crocodile`s office. I herd that he was difficult to talk to, twisted like a murder, and puts purple ooze that after a week it puts you in a coma. its was 2 hours till i got my shots so I went to leave but I decided not to. after about half an hour in I decided to go get some food, I waited 5 minuets for my food. when I got my food I went back I and it was my turn to go in...I went in he seemed nice.
You really leave the reader hanging at the end of your story. Be sure to read your story out loud to yourself and take time to check for punctuation. You have many capitals missing and random numbers in your writing.
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